#PoemsAbout #FierceBattle @brokenspinearts.bsky.social @alanparry83.bsky.social & thanks to @thepaulconnolly.bsky.social for the inspiration to plunder Ecclesiastes! This one pertains to the relational domain, the post-traumatic soulscape 'when the (unspecified) battle is over'. Thanks for reading 🙏 - ThreadSky

johnadlam.bsky.social • 15 days ago

#PoemsAbout #FierceBattle
@brokenspinearts.bsky.social
@alanparry83.bsky.social
& thanks to @thepaulconnolly.bsky.social for the inspiration to plunder Ecclesiastes! This one pertains to the relational domain, the post-traumatic soulscape 'when the (unspecified) battle is over'. Thanks for reading 🙏

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johnchmura.bsky.social•15 days ago

Wow, you poke us right in the eye and you don’t let up!

johnadlam.bsky.social•14 days ago

Thank you John, yes, sorry about that! Whatever became of the duties of the guest? But thank you for bearing with its eyepokingness 🙄🥰

notdoriangray.bsky.social•13 days ago

Those first three words are amazing. They clash but fit and draw us into a poem where we seep through layers of grit and somehow end up unsettled but at rest. Lovely strange journey you've taken us on here.

johnadlam.bsky.social•13 days ago

#PoemsAbout #FierceBattle thank you so much Dorian for the deep read: wonderful and so very interesting feedback! I shall think about it some more, I already made a small revision I now will have to revisit. I am still trying to digest your own poem, more on that anon🥰
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alanparry83.bsky.social•12 days ago

‘time’s familiar drip, drip, drip interrupted' offers up an eerie disorientation when trauma fractures the everyday. It calcifies silence. Bleak. #KeepWriting #PoemsAbout #FierceBattle

johnadlam.bsky.social•12 days ago

Yes! Thank you indeed. Just exactly the phenomenology I was trying to capture 🙏♥️🙏

sueimnw.bsky.social•14 days ago

Strong, unrelenting, all the way to that great last line.

johnadlam.bsky.social•14 days ago

Thank you very much Sue 🙏❤️🙏

owlnsquirrels1111.bsky.social•15 days ago

“Silence
settles in layers of sediment
as flat and drab as forgetting.” Great line and poem.

johnadlam.bsky.social•14 days ago

Thank you very much! I am glad you liked that. The line floated down the poem from somewhere nearer the top, and the sediment idea only presented itself once the phrase had sunk to the bottom. Curious parallel process, which I only just realised as I write now, so there's another! 🥰

owlnsquirrels1111.bsky.social•14 days ago

You’re most welcome! And thanks for sharing the poetic process… it’s interesting! Quite often, I’ve started with the ending part of a poem too. 🙌

tracierenee.bsky.social•15 days ago

Vivid!

merrildsmith.bsky.social•13 days ago

"Silence settles in layers of sediment" is a great image, but the word-sound is also wonderful. This poem is so full of fierce imagery and sound, pops and drips.

johnadlam.bsky.social•13 days ago

Thank you so much Merril for lovely feedback and I am happy that you pick up on the ferocities of sound 🙏❤️🙏

merrildsmith.bsky.social•12 days ago

You're very welcome, John! 💙