My first for #poemsabout and @alanparry83.bsky.social at @brokenspinearts.bsky.social I say first because when those #oldskin prompts come through email later I won't be able to resist at least another two. Entitled: Vellum - ThreadSky

lozzawriting.bsky.social • 24 days ago

My first for #poemsabout and @alanparry83.bsky.social at @brokenspinearts.bsky.social

I say first because when those

#oldskin

prompts come through email later I won't be able to resist at least another two.

Entitled: Vellum

Comments

janedougherty47.bsky.social•24 days ago

Two sides of the same flesh. I hadn't thought of hands like that before.

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

I was thinking more the chest and back. But now I look at my hands. There's always going to be that fatter skin, isn't there? I love discoursing with you on a Friday about therlse thing Jane.

janedougherty47.bsky.social•23 days ago

It was the idea of the aging hand that sprang to mind for me, the tight plump palm and the slack, parchmenty back of the hand, but I can see how it works for the whole body too. I much prefer this platform to X for conversation. So much quieter!

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

I love the hands thing. You should explore that.

janedougherty47.bsky.social•23 days ago

There's a of of that asymmetry in nature when you think about it. And you've made me think about it 💙

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

That's what is so good about this poetry conversation!

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

Me too. There's nothing there.

2 likes on an acceptance post. 😂 Down from 53 is the indicator that it's a dead space. Plus I don't like the boss or any of his pals. I'm just there till the wind changes with the litmag. And then we're moving the whole thing here.

janedougherty47.bsky.social•23 days ago

I don't mind people staying on with Musk if they think it's good for business. I know that if someone has spend years building up a considerable following they're reluctant to risk losing it by moving here. I'd just like them to stop telling everyone how righteous they are, that's all.

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

My account has been totally suppressed over there. I get 5 views a post. My friends are all still there and saying I'm not showing up on the feed. I just don't have time to waste my time flogging a dead platform. That's the main thing for me.

brokenspinearts.bsky.social•23 days ago

The contrast between tautness and looseness, past and present, held together by that ticking ‘bone clock’—stunning! And those final ‘Tomorrow’s? They ache. Beautiful work, Laura. #KeepWriting #PoemsAbout #OldSkin

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

Thanks so much for this. ❤️

pdevonald.bsky.social•24 days ago

Great to see you part of this, and such a wonderful introduction. Vellum is such a unique route into this, such an excellent response. It resonates with me - Andrea Arnold's film Cow. Very clever inspired writing

lozzawriting.bsky.social•24 days ago

Thanks Peter. I've been here a few weeks. But I appreciate you spotting this today. Thanks for the comment.

hareontherun.bsky.social•24 days ago

..... the tick / of a bone clock 💥. Great phrasing in this 👌

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

Thanks Roger

hybrid-gesture.bsky.social•23 days ago

A wonderful flow in this poem, mirroring the way time flows in a story, or a life — starting on those deliberate short stanzas, and then picking up momentum, and finally ending in the resolution of repetition

“Tomorrow
Tomorrow
Tomorrow”

Great work 👏👏💜

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

Thanks so much Jesse!

fiftywords.bsky.social•23 days ago

This is delicate and rich with imagery. It has a poignant sense of time slipping away. The metaphor of vellum works really well. An atmospheric reflection on time and the body.

lozzawriting.bsky.social•23 days ago

Got to confess I used some of the paper words from last week's additional prompts. They were still swirling around. Thanks for this comment! Appreciated