docs.google.com/document/d/1... I know no one will read it, but I would like it if you gave my webnovel a read. I'm redoing it from the ground up and would like opinions on what I'm doing and what I should change before officially publishing it. - ThreadSky

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nexusmhx.bsky.social • 39 days ago

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JXu1HL1tBUryIqEy63ORlnfXqcgR3Nj6yxQQtE_Rxn4/edit?usp=sharing…

I know no one will read it, but I would like it if you gave my webnovel a read. I'm redoing it from the ground up and would like opinions on what I'm doing and what I should change before officially publishing it.

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kisekisimp.bsky.social•39 days ago

This is probably just a me thing, is the character name in the surname-first name format? Or is it in the western format of first name-last name?

nexusmhx.bsky.social•39 days ago

It’s gonna be in the surname-first format

kisekisimp.bsky.social•39 days ago

My English isn't good enough for me to make any specific recommendation, but here are couple of things that I notice.

- It seems like verb tenses are not very consistent, occasionally switching between past and present tenses
- Sometimes it's not very clear who is speaking during the dialogues

kisekisimp.bsky.social•39 days ago

The plot is interesting. I like how you revealed the main character's role as a matchmaker at the end. Not sure what the storyline of the next chapter will be, but maybe you can give a little background on the characters/settings?

nexusmhx.bsky.social•39 days ago

Yeah I see that. Mostly cause grammarly did that I’m willing to bet.

And yeah I can see that. Tried to make it so I didn’t have he said, she said after every paragraph. Might toy around with it more

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