SUPERNATURAL × NINTH HOUSE
The sharp metallic tang of bloodshed filled the air, assaulting Valerie’s nose and setting her senses on edge.
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The sharp metallic tang of bloodshed filled the air, assaulting Valerie’s nose and setting her senses on edge.
#1stlinepit #A #F #Q #CMe
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Comments
Bloodshed is an act but is being referenced as a thing.
Your mix of tenses, while correct, also overloads. I suggest you swap to present tense once.
Ex: The tang of blood in the air assaulted Valerie, setting her senses on..
Good luck. :-)