This has a LOT of potential. I love the way you wrote the officer, surprising us with the fact that somebody we'd expect to be tough is so gentle. And the boy.... my heart immediately goes out to him!
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I mean, the SWAT officers arent meant to be bad people, as you see with that one officer, but in the broader context I'm trying to avoid the sort of glorify and thrill you gen on TV and show a more realistic light if that makes sense
Thanks! The problem is, this is the only scene hes in. A major theme of my story is that as the chief seeks to reform the police, he's hesitant at calling in SWAT as he sees the risk of escalation, but eventually has to when he cant trust other officers. I wanted to show it still had consequences
What if he volunteered for a task force that's involved with the reform? Or maybe the chief notices something in him, and recruits him to the task force?
i definitely can't focus on that, just because the plot moves on pretty quick, but it is an interesting idea i could use later, maybe as i explore at the end when a certain event vastly reduces the opposition to the chiefs policies and show others are coming around. 🤔 now im wondering lol
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