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Pine Barrens Poet
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Those transitional areas are so inspirational!!!
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IDK, that combination can produce great poems. But there are great topics for poetry that aren’t necessarily intensely personal and a light touch might at times work better than icy craft.
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What a gorgeous spot!!!
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Thank you, David!
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Thank you so much Glenn! I will proudly display that on my psychic shelf!!!
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Thank you, Frank. I’ve been carrying that around in my head since his first term when Kellyanne Conway talked about alternative facts and I heard an analyst say that words were transactional for him.
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“scan on the horizon…”
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Those last two lines, 🐛🍎🥊🥊
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Thank you!
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Oh yes, the rivers and estuaries of New Jersey have plenty of raptors and waterfowl! So many people think it is all oil tanks and pizzerias.
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Those are four great images, and together they lend a great sturdiness to this poem even if each image presents a fragility.
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Yeah, beating would be cliché. Clicking invests so much meaning into the image.
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Thank you! And, no doubt!
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And thank you for your poem. I, too, find vultures quite intriguing. Ironically, I live in “Ocean County,” but I rarely see a sea bird, whereas vultures dominate the sky over my house.
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That’s what I love about this space. When we’re not always sure until we see our poems through another’s eyes!
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Oh yeah, the double meaning of “they will all get their chance…”
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Sometimes we need a day like this, a poem like this. The push and the pull of the sun and the moon. The affirmation of life is so well drawn at the end, where the narrator realizes what the unity with the vultures would entail.
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I really like the beginning and ending. Starting a poem of transition by talking about doing the same thing in the same place every day. And the ending telling us it’s not the same.
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It’s a great metaphor, almost mechanical until the narrator contemplates leaving out his heart.
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“I was annoyed and so was he, but we raked…” Everything turns on that we.
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You put us right in that extended moment.
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And the music!
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Frank, your posts so often pack a triple punch. Translation as transition, and translation of a poem about transition. I love this post!
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Definitely breathing new life into these cliches by subtly and not so sutbly adding perspective.
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Oh yeah, it fits!
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I want to shout get up get on up, ha!
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This is both amusing and instructive!
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That first stanza is great because you so aptly extend the metaphor.
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Indeed, subtly!
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The quandary of that ending really makes all of the imagery tie together.
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“We lurch, settle into/an inconvenient world.” Killer line.
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Yes, the ghost, glass, coffin stanza…
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“the mind is a bingo machine of words”
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“I guess now everyone knows!”
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I can only repeat what’s been said, well done. Yeah, it’s her house, but it’s a shame you still have to pay the mortgage taxes on it.
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It’s so good how the words create pitch and rhythm that match the tone from so heavy to lightening.
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Thanks! That’s how I felt as I wrote it!
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Thank you, Carmella!
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Thank you, Carolyn!
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Oh, that’s great. But part of the beauty of the poem is that the reader can fill in the blanks in infinite ways!
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Thank you, Anna!
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Oh wow, resenting the “usurper.”
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The way phrases are turned around really reinforces the idea of transition!
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I think I can hear the intonation of that “well.”
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The petals as mouths “digesting the sun.”
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Wow, “two hundred years too late” and the final image.
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I love this because you give us plenty of narrative but her wondering makes us crave even more backstory!!!