I cannot believe this is the writing they're putting on their own kickstarter page, let alone for a Disco Elysium alike, which is entirely balanced on its writing.
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yep, you can basically see the self-satisfied narcissism radiating off the page. but don't worry! I'm 100% certain there's a very sad, very serious reason why she's so outgoing and smartass and cool and good at everything externally
Stilleto wit and sandpaper charm is gonna bug the fuck out of me for a bit. If you're gonna use opposing metaphors, they should actually oppose. Velvet wit and sandpaper charm. Smoothe and rough. Still pretentious af but reads easier. Or Just say sharp wit and abrasive demeanor ffs.
Right like it's that specific kind of *not*-writing where it's this assemblages of phrases and clichés but they don't go together at all. It's just skimmed bites of posts over a decade, all fighting one another for space.
I'm starting to see why some people see no issue with AI slop, because their own creative process is almost indistinguishable with just a much smaller scope of, uh, "inspiration". Equal lack of internal thought going on from one phrase to the next.
It's all peaks no valleys. It's reducing everything you have ever watched or read into quips and quotes forever, divorced of context, and that's the way they like it
a stiletto is sharp and subtle though! if the point is "you have the OPPOSITE of rapier wit" then "it's like a really SHORT sword instead of a LONG one" doesn't make sense
a rapier's characteristics are that it is a light, elegant weapon which has a very precise thin tip for stabbing; "wit like a nail-studded two-by-four" would be a MUCH more appropriate opposite
congrats to them for actually discovering a pitch worse than "Disco Elysium but you're a young witch looking for her lost cat" and the answer is "what if 2016 tumblr wrote it"
hopetown? it's called fucking hopetown? what the fuck is happening here. did everyone involved recently suffer a massive head injury. are they getting the pod save america guys to voice characters
Strong Female Character Who Kicks Ass has only been extremely hack for a decade and a half, that's fine. My personal nadir is "privileged rich child exiled from the family."
That's what you pinkos like, right? Rich people getting their ass kicked by a sexy lady? That's what everyone liked about Disco Elysium? A power fantasy about doing violence to perfectly fine people just for having different opinions? Is that what you leftie shits want?
see this is what truly staggers me. like okay you're not going to be about politics, okay, that's fine, you don't have to be. what are you actually about?
the answer here seems abundantly clear, "a cool hero who's sad inside fixing a problem cause she's just so fucking cool and please draw fanart"
I don't actually think it's fine, and yeah, you kind of have to be. DE's setting is steeped in political violence and every single person who live sin that world is marked by it. You can't just go "well, all that aside, let's do a fun one" like it's Far Cry: Blood Dragon.
It'll do gangbusters too. It'll sell a billion copies and the entire gaming press is going to put their money together to buy it a massive golden cock to suck.
God fucking dammit if there was one thing I didn't want to get defiled by fucking gamers and libs...
I'm agog looking at some of these choices. it's like reducing all of the fractured mental state of the detective from DE into "dialogue choices that are good, evil, and snarky"
this is straight up something I've heard a 7th grader in an Invader Zim hoodie yell. The difference being that was 2012 and it is currently the year of our Lord 2025...
"things are total shit, all these rotten fuckers are ready to blow each other's heads off and you're here to stop that, you awful, miserable excuse for a human being, you absolute dogshit person, by being the same kind of fucking asshole you always have been: a total fucking piece of shit"
i feel like a critical piece of the Disco Elysium puzzle that these people are missing is that it lets you find out for YOURSELF what kind of fuckup Harry is, how fucked things are in Revachol and why, and maybe CHANGE all that a bit
here the prompt seems to have been "make the game sound like absolute unrelenting misery to get through, because we don't believe hope and joy are ARTISTIC"
it's like a mom with aspirations to be a noir writer and the guy who writes the text on the back of movie cases both got together and asked ChatGPT to come up with this
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I hate it.
The process informs your results, it changes them into something better. You start interrogating your ideas and crystallize them into the best.
Slop is just an end result with no joy.
[I can't upload images today so just pretend Kyle MacLachlan in Showgirls is saying this]
Like a funny nasty asshole who makes a lot of enemies with his offensive jokes
the answer here seems abundantly clear, "a cool hero who's sad inside fixing a problem cause she's just so fucking cool and please draw fanart"
God fucking dammit if there was one thing I didn't want to get defiled by fucking gamers and libs...